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Thursday, 14 November 2019

Knocked Out

In writing we had to do some narrative writing. This was a perfect time for my creativeness. My story is called knocked out.

It's about me being knocked out in the middle of the forest and my friends try to find me.

Something I found hard was adding chapters. I didn't have to but I did.
Something I enjoyed was the whole thing.


Knocked Out



Chapter 1
Where am I!

Where am I? Why am I in the forest on the ground? This is all strange.
Why does my head hurt? I’m hungry. I’ve just woken up in the middle of the forest?!?!?! I need to know what happened.

My name is Tyler. I am an 11 year old kid. My favourite movie is called Star Wars but we won’t talk about that now.
The last thing I remember was leaving my house all alone to take a walk in the forest. Now I’m lying on the ground while my head hurts.
What am I going to do? How am I going to get out of the forest? I need answers.

Chapter 2
About 1 month ago

About 1 month ago I won a race between the fastest runner in school. I became the most popular kid in school. I was getting rewards everyday.
Everyone was my friend. Someone even gave me a big present.
“Shut the back door!” I said as I opened the present.

A few days past and I was now losing friends. This is because the race got old. Now I was the most less popular kid in school.
It was fun while the popularity lasted.

A month later I was at home. I decided to go for a walk in the forest. So I told my parents and they let me go alone.
While I was walking through the forest, something bad happened. I tripped and my head hit a rock on the leavy floor. I was knocked out….

Chapter 3
Now

Now I have no idea of what happened. So I started walking. Now, I didn’t know how long it’s been. The leave’s scrunched as I walked over them. It was annoying.
I was hungry, hurt and thirsty. I had no idea of which way I came.

If you want to know how long it’s been, well, it’s been 14 days. 2 weeks!
At my house my parents were worried. All around town my friends were worried. My parents called the police.

“We’ll find your son.” The police said to my Mum through the phone. (I knew that my mum was talking to the police because I had to include in this fake story that my mum was talking to the police. Obviously someone would’ve called the police. How would they know I would missing.) 
They began they’re search as soon as possible.

The one that was worried about me the most was my friend, Dob.

Chapter 4
Dob

Dob was the same age as me. He was like me. He was unpopular and smart. He didn’t like Star Wars though.
He started searching for me. He searched the buildings, the rivers, even the sewers. But the one place he didn’t search was the forest.

Now, the forest had a name. It was called the dark forest….
Unfortunately that was the forest I went in. It was a terrifying forest. No one dared to go in. Except for me. Not even the police searched there.
Good thing I had my phone with me. I knew Dob what a phone, too. So I called him. He answered.

“Dob.” I said on the phone. “Tyler.” Dob replied. “Oh I am happy to hear you.” I said happy. 
“Now, have you been searching for me?” “Yes.” Dob said with a smile. 
“I’ve searched everywhere except the forest.” “Well I’m in the forest.” I said. Dob was surprised. No one dared to go in there….

Chapter 5
The Dark Forest Search Crew Part 1

“Dob, make some friends and find me. Call the team The Dark Forest Search Crew and find me.” I said to Dob. “Call it The DFSC for short.”
“Ok.” Said Dob. So the next day he went to school and got some friends. New friend’s because he didn’t have any.
The first person Dob went to was Bob. Bob and Dob rhymed. So they became friends. The next person was named Rob. Bob, Dob and Rob rhymed too. 2 more people were needed for The DFSC. (The Dark Forest Search Crew.)
So they found 2 people named Bop and Rop. They rhyme too.

So after school with the crew, Dob went to the Dark Forest. It was really dark. In fact that’s how the forest got its name.
“Bob, your code name will be Chicken Nugget.” Said Dob asking for laughter. “Rob, your code name will be French Fries. As in Mcdonald's french fries. Bop, your code name will be, Burger. Rop, your code name is Food.”
“Really Dob. Those are all food names. Especially my name.” Said Rob frustrated. They all entered the forest, scared.

Chapter 6
The Dark Forest

The DFSC all had walky talkys. Dob had a spare 1 for me.
I was still missing. I don’t know if they’ll find me. I continued walking. I heard a twitch crack. I looked around. I saw something in the bush.
“Whoever you are, come out.” I said. Dob came out from the bush.

“I told everyone to split up.” Dob said. “Really!” I said. “Scaring me like that. I told you to find me not scare me.”
“Chicken Nugget, French Fries, Burger and Food, I found him. Right in the middle of the clearing.” Said Dob. The DFSC came out of nowhere.
“AH!” I screamed. “Tyler, I’m so glad we found you.” Said Dob giving me a walky talky. “Your code name can be, Awesome.” “And your code name can be the Scare.” I said.
We started walking. “Do you know the way out.” I said to Dob. “Nope.” Said Dob. It was scary in the Dark Forest.

Chapter 7
It’s Alive

While we were walking, we decided to split up.
“The Scare, your with me. Chicken Nugget, your with French Fries. Burger, your with Food.” I said. So we all split up.

While Burger (Bop) and Food (Rop) walked around the forest. While walking the ran into a wall. It was big, and it had a face on it. It was sleeping.
Chicken Nugget (Bob) and French Fries (Rob) also ran into the sleeping thing. The 4 of them didn’t know what it was.
Me and Scare (Dob) ran into the tree monster too. It woke up because we were running. The DFSC got back together and ran.

This walking tree was faster than a cheetah. We were running for our lives. We saw some trees that looked high and climbable. So we climbed up.
“What are we going to do Awesome.” Said Dob. “I don’t know.” I said out of ideas. “I got a plan.” Said Bop. “We need to use the vine’s from these trees and use them to wrap up the tree monster, after that we run.”
“Great idea Bop.” Said Rop and Rob. So we gathered some vines.

Chapter 8
The Dark Forest Search Crew Part 2

We had all the vines ready with me as bait. The tree monster came out of nowhere running at me as I moved out of the way and got behind the monster.
I pushed the monster into the vine trap and it worked. After that, The Dark Forest Search Crew ran, leaving me behind. I followed. We saw, an exit….

Finally, out of the forest. We ran out of the forest as I sto-

Chapter 9
The DFSC Save the Day

During our escape from the forest, we stopped at a factory with molten lava in it. It also had a chimney that explodes every 5 minutes. BOOM.
The chimney exploded. We decided to go down and take a closer look. We looked through a window. The lava was right next to fuel cells. We thought that if the lava exploded near the fuel cells, this factory will blow up.

It was so hot. The lava near the fuel cells was about to explode. We all ran. There was no one in the factory. We ran as fast as a cheetah.
In the factory, the lava exploded and the fuel cells exploded too. Now there is a lot of fire. Firefighters arrived with trucks and helicopters.

The DFSC and I ran for our lives as we got surrounded by lava. But thankfully there was an opening that we got through. The fire was big. That’s when I got an idea.
I saw one of those water things on a hill. I followed by The DFSC, ran to the water tanker.

We got there. “Everybody, grab a big stick from the tree up here and hit the tanker.” I said bossing them around. The Dark Forest Search Crew hit the tanker legs with a branch causing the tanker to fall down the hill, putting out the fire.

Chapter 10
Tyler is Found

In the end the fire was put out thanks to the tanker falling. I was reunited with my family and we all lived happily ever after. The police called my parents that they found me. That’s how I knew my parents called them earlyer.
My parents and I were so happy that I got a new videogame.

The end.

Chapter 11
Alternate Ending 

So this story could have ended differently. So 1 extra chapter of what could have happened.

Finally, out of the forest. We ran out of the forest as I sto-

There was a big explosion. It came from a factory. A lava factory. The Dark Forest Search Crew and I went down to see.
There were fuel cells right next to the lava. While we were looking, we were caught. It was bad guys. Dob still had his phone with him. So I stomped on 1 of the bad guys foot. There were 4 bad guys.
They started chasing me. I told Dob to use his phone (Because he had his phone) to call the police.

So he did. “We’ll be there as soon as possible.” Said the police on the phone.
So the police arrived. They shut down the factory and took away the fuel cells. They took the bad guys to prison, (No need for court) and I was reunited with my parents.

In this ending, I probably won’t get a video game. Good thing this isn’t the ending that happened. 
In this ending I got a LEGO set instead.

The end.

Did you like the story?
Why or why not?
Do you like the alternate ending or the real ending?
Why?
Did you like the code names?
Why or why not?

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